I have watched a lot of stick fight movies. And I mean A LOT. A lot of the reviews and the comments below keep saying about how you should improve and shit but haven't really told you how. I'll tell you.
1. Add more moves and exaggerate the effects of the hits. Kicks are awesome and all but you gotta add more throws. If you search for a Flash in Newgrounds called "The Wall", you would see that the stick fight in that flash is not as intense like most people. But, it managed to gain popularity because it used weapons, different way of fighting people and a little bit of humor. The wall even cracked when he shoved that guy against the wall. That's what I mean by exaggerating.
2. Make it more intense. Look at Terkoiz's work and you will see that his work is pretty awesome. Probably because he makes his fights intense. 10 guys all moving simultaneously to take on that one guy. You can add more intensity buy adding more mid tiers and more weaknesses on the hero. At least there's suspense and it doesn't get boring. Even Dragon Ball uses the same technique.
3. Change sound effects. Audio is crucial in stick fights. It makes up 30-50% of the atmosphere in the fight. Find a solid audio to accompany the hitting sounds, and you got yourself something good.
4. Add a story. Xiaoxiao never had a story and it's understandable since the guy who made it was Chinese and didn't knew much English. But ever since then, almost everything had to have a story. A backstory is fine. I mean, what IS Abercity? Where is it? What does it do? Why are there people who are fighting him? And why is he fighting them? Is he the bad guy?
5. Research some martial arts. Know what parts of your body that can be used to fight. Arms,legs,knee,elbow,head,feet,fist. Everyone of these can be made visual.
I think I already told enough. But to keep it simple : The stick fights need more variety.
For real. I know you're making a long credit to show comedy and all but I really think you should make a third one.
This is awesome. For some reason, the part where the sister says "You gotta admit, he achieved something most of us would dream about" touched me deeply.
Make the next one. It's awesome. I wanna see the kid do something too. I wanna see the drama and the awesome music I heard in the first one. Make an amazing storyline friend.
It was short but it was compact full of what I'd expect. The epic zombie reveal from Resident Evil 1, the humorous middle scene, the girlfriend being a zombie, and of course the awesome ending.
Everything was correct here since the character was someone everyone can relate too and the situation was simple to understand. Not only that, it didn't show too much bravado by giving the character a whole arsenal of weapons to shoot everything down.
It was a bit short, and no dialogues which is a bit of a negative, but I guess it's cool. If you plan to make a series out of this, I totally recommend it.
Long story short: Story was good. Character was balanced. Situation understandable. Dark humor. And good quality of animation and sounds.
I always hear people telling other people to give constructive criticism. Well, here's mine.
Graphics: 9 : Overall, the graphics were great. The stickmen were smooth and the animations were fluid and all. No problems here.
Story: 6: At least give us some insight what's he so mad about. And what's his real objective is. Is he fighting for revenge or just he just wanna let of some steam?
Audio: 7 : I give it a 7 since it was pretty awesome, but i dont really like that kind of music so you have to ask somebody else on that department.
Gameplay: 10 : The gameplay is the best. When you play a power action game, you expect to have something like this. Powerful sounds, moving screen and a whole lot of power. Nowadays, not even flash, even console games are starting to lack this fundementals.
Overall, there's not really much to improve. Just, a story, and a better background art i guess. The rest were fine.
Captain Planet too! My brother asked me what song i was singing when i was walking with him to visit my mom in the hospital. I told him and he was like..." Uhh...."
I say, this was enjoyable. Not to the part that i want more, but, only when i have nothing else to do. Anyway, smooth up the animations, and you're good.
It was pretty obvious since i've been watching HL2 and 1 for a couple of weeks now since i dont have the graphics card to install them.
All i can say was this lack explanation. And talking. There was only talking during the beginning and then it was self explanatory. I mean, first of all you should at least give a hint on why there are people in the tanks. Or why was she on the moon.
That way, viewers will grasp the situation and try to figure out the next plot. Also, the suit needs to be explained as well.
This is a good piece of work but it lacks talking. But it is the first episode. I expect more talking and a bit of humor in the next episode. Until then, good luck.
jackripperz
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Rated 3 / 5 stars May 20, 2010
Trust me, you can make it awesome.
I have watched a lot of stick fight movies. And I mean A LOT. A lot of the reviews and the comments below keep saying about how you should improve and shit but haven't really told you how. I'll tell you.
1. Add more moves and exaggerate the effects of the hits. Kicks are awesome and all but you gotta add more throws. If you search for a Flash in Newgrounds called "The Wall", you would see that the stick fight in that flash is not as intense like most people. But, it managed to gain popularity because it used weapons, different way of fighting people and a little bit of humor. The wall even cracked when he shoved that guy against the wall. That's what I mean by exaggerating.
2. Make it more intense. Look at Terkoiz's work and you will see that his work is pretty awesome. Probably because he makes his fights intense. 10 guys all moving simultaneously to take on that one guy. You can add more intensity buy adding more mid tiers and more weaknesses on the hero. At least there's suspense and it doesn't get boring. Even Dragon Ball uses the same technique.
3. Change sound effects. Audio is crucial in stick fights. It makes up 30-50% of the atmosphere in the fight. Find a solid audio to accompany the hitting sounds, and you got yourself something good.
4. Add a story. Xiaoxiao never had a story and it's understandable since the guy who made it was Chinese and didn't knew much English. But ever since then, almost everything had to have a story. A backstory is fine. I mean, what IS Abercity? Where is it? What does it do? Why are there people who are fighting him? And why is he fighting them? Is he the bad guy?
5. Research some martial arts. Know what parts of your body that can be used to fight. Arms,legs,knee,elbow,head,feet,fist. Everyone of these can be made visual.
I think I already told enough. But to keep it simple : The stick fights need more variety.
Thank you, I read the entire thing. I'll keep some of those things in account on my next animation. Wonderful feedback man. ;)
Rated 5 / 5 stars March 9, 2010
It touched me deeply.
For real. I know you're making a long credit to show comedy and all but I really think you should make a third one.
This is awesome. For some reason, the part where the sister says "You gotta admit, he achieved something most of us would dream about" touched me deeply.
Make the next one. It's awesome. I wanna see the kid do something too. I wanna see the drama and the awesome music I heard in the first one. Make an amazing storyline friend.
Rated 5 / 5 stars August 1, 2009
It's awesome.
It was short but it was compact full of what I'd expect. The epic zombie reveal from Resident Evil 1, the humorous middle scene, the girlfriend being a zombie, and of course the awesome ending.
Everything was correct here since the character was someone everyone can relate too and the situation was simple to understand. Not only that, it didn't show too much bravado by giving the character a whole arsenal of weapons to shoot everything down.
It was a bit short, and no dialogues which is a bit of a negative, but I guess it's cool. If you plan to make a series out of this, I totally recommend it.
Long story short: Story was good. Character was balanced. Situation understandable. Dark humor. And good quality of animation and sounds.
Kudos to you.
Rated 4 / 5 stars November 3, 2008
Constructive Review.
I always hear people telling other people to give constructive criticism. Well, here's mine.
Graphics: 9 : Overall, the graphics were great. The stickmen were smooth and the animations were fluid and all. No problems here.
Story: 6: At least give us some insight what's he so mad about. And what's his real objective is. Is he fighting for revenge or just he just wanna let of some steam?
Audio: 7 : I give it a 7 since it was pretty awesome, but i dont really like that kind of music so you have to ask somebody else on that department.
Gameplay: 10 : The gameplay is the best. When you play a power action game, you expect to have something like this. Powerful sounds, moving screen and a whole lot of power. Nowadays, not even flash, even console games are starting to lack this fundementals.
Overall, there's not really much to improve. Just, a story, and a better background art i guess. The rest were fine.
Rated 5 / 5 stars July 11, 2008
I helped.
Yeah, i voted 5 on this. Thank me if you must.
Seriously, it was fine. Didnt made me laugh but it was entertaining when it was on the Flash Portal.
Rated 5 / 5 stars July 3, 2008
Hey, i was talking about
Captain Planet too! My brother asked me what song i was singing when i was walking with him to visit my mom in the hospital. I told him and he was like..." Uhh...."
Rated 5 / 5 stars June 18, 2008
Call me crazy,
But i liked the audio. I could use it.
oka
Rated 3.5 / 5 stars June 16, 2008
Fairly good.
I say, this was enjoyable. Not to the part that i want more, but, only when i have nothing else to do. Anyway, smooth up the animations, and you're good.
Rated 4 / 5 stars March 10, 2008
Let me guess, you were inspired by HL2?
It was pretty obvious since i've been watching HL2 and 1 for a couple of weeks now since i dont have the graphics card to install them.
All i can say was this lack explanation. And talking. There was only talking during the beginning and then it was self explanatory. I mean, first of all you should at least give a hint on why there are people in the tanks. Or why was she on the moon.
That way, viewers will grasp the situation and try to figure out the next plot. Also, the suit needs to be explained as well.
This is a good piece of work but it lacks talking. But it is the first episode. I expect more talking and a bit of humor in the next episode. Until then, good luck.
I'm going to go out on a limb here and suggest that you *may* have commented on the wrong submission...Just a guess.
Rated 3 / 5 stars January 2, 2008
Original
This is pretty good.Its pretty original except for the sticks which existed since god knows when.
Keep it up and next time dont put random things like that.Hurts my eye.